Guest guest Posted June 10, 2012 Report Share Posted June 10, 2012 Please forgive me if I've posted this before. I can't recall. ORIGINAL VERSION There was an old woman who lived in a shoe She had so many children she didn't know what to do. She gave them some broth without any bread, Then whipped them all soundly And put them to bed. REVISED By Jordan Riak There was an old woman Who lived in a shoe. She was a kindhearted mom Who knew exactly what to do. She raised all her children With patience and love. Never once did she give them A spank, shake or shove. Her children all learned To be gentle toward others, And good parents too When they became fathers and mothers. From their days in the shoe They learned this about living: Kindness, not force, Is the gift that keeps giving. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest guest Posted June 10, 2012 Report Share Posted June 10, 2012 I don't remember your posting that updated nursery rhyme before, so thanks for posting it now. It makes a great deal of sense to me. Thumb's up! And it reminds me of another poem or essay I've always liked, that my Sister sent me a long time ago. It's called " Children Learn What They Live " by Dorothy Law Nolte, Ph.D. Here's the link: http://www.empowermentresources.com/info2/childrenlearn-long_version.html These poems and others like them would work well as material for a class on how to be a good-emough parent. Anyway. I agree that poetry and the other arts are healthy, positive ways we can express our pain and ameliorate the damage done to us. -Annie > > Please forgive me if I've posted this before. I can't recall. > > > ORIGINAL VERSION > There was an old woman who lived in a shoe > She had so many children she didn't know what to do. > She gave them some broth without any bread, > Then whipped them all soundly > And put them to bed. > > > REVISED > By Jordan Riak > > There was an old woman > Who lived in a shoe. > She was a kindhearted mom > Who knew exactly what to do. > > She raised all her children > With patience and love. > Never once did she give them > A spank, shake or shove. > > Her children all learned > To be gentle toward others, > And good parents too > When they became fathers and mothers. > > From their days in the shoe > They learned this about living: > Kindness, not force, > Is the gift that keeps giving. > Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest guest Posted June 10, 2012 Report Share Posted June 10, 2012 That's nice. Thank you for sharing it! > > I don't remember your posting that updated nursery rhyme before, so thanks for posting it now. It makes a great deal of sense to me. Thumb's up! And it reminds me of another poem or essay I've always liked, that my Sister sent me a long time ago. > > It's called " Children Learn What They Live " by Dorothy Law Nolte, Ph.D. Here's the link: > > http://www.empowermentresources.com/info2/childrenlearn-long_version.html > > These poems and others like them would work well as material for a class on how to be a good-emough parent. > > Anyway. I agree that poetry and the other arts are healthy, positive ways we can express our pain and ameliorate the damage done to us. > > -Annie Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest guest Posted June 11, 2012 Report Share Posted June 11, 2012 Really loved the revised poem, thanks for posting it. > > Please forgive me if I've posted this before. I can't recall. > > > ORIGINAL VERSION > There was an old woman who lived in a shoe > She had so many children she didn't know what to do. > She gave them some broth without any bread, > Then whipped them all soundly > And put them to bed. > > > REVISED > By Jordan Riak > > There was an old woman > Who lived in a shoe. > She was a kindhearted mom > Who knew exactly what to do. > > She raised all her children > With patience and love. > Never once did she give them > A spank, shake or shove. > > Her children all learned > To be gentle toward others, > And good parents too > When they became fathers and mothers. > > From their days in the shoe > They learned this about living: > Kindness, not force, > Is the gift that keeps giving. > Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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